11 读后续写：救人型（故事构造“三部曲”）-2022年高考英语读后续写技巧与训练（新高考专用）

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读后续写：救人型

Part1：经典例文（铁轨救婴儿）....................................................................1

Part2：救人故事构造三部曲...........................................................................4

第一步：救人之前（恶劣环境+负面情绪）.............................................4

第二步：救人之中（努力+救人动作+如释重负）....................................5

第三步：救人之后（感激+升华）............................................................6

Part3：灵活应用..............................................................................................7

例1：河中救人.........................................................................................7

例2：海边救人.........................................................................................9

读后续写很多时候会涉及自然灾害与防范、安全常识与自我保护的话题，会经常涉

及到危难之际，挺身而出救助他人的故事。在这个话题中有时会写到危难之际，利用所

学急救知识，成功救人脱离生命危险的故事；有时会写到楼内突发火灾，警察 /群众舍

己救人的故事；有时会写到群众 /路人遇到有人不幸溺水，鼓足勇气跳入水中施救的的

故事。

Part1：经典例文（铁轨救婴儿）

It was 7 a.m. on 12 May 1998.Mohr had already scanned several packages listing dangerous

materials aboard the train. The presence of gas would mean taking extra precaution when braking

the 6,200-ton train. With explosive gas on board, it would be disastrous if the train came off the

track. After a final inspection, Mohr jumped aboard. He was heading east, into a sun that promised

a beautiful day for their 276-km run to Peru, Indiana.

At around noon that day, Marshall prepared to tackle some yardwork. It was a beautiful day

for it, she thought, gazing past the houses across the street. Some 45 meters away, railroad tracks

shone in the sun.

Marshall began working in a patch ( 地块） of soil. Sitting next to her, cheerfully running

her hands through dirt, was her 19-month-old daughter, Emily. For a while, she kept turning to

check on Emily, who played close at hand. Eventually, though, Marshall's absorption in her work

became total.

Mohr approached the town where Marshall lived at about 1:45 p.m. and slowed the train to

the 40-kmph speed limit. He activated the flashing lights and warning bell. Mohr had been

through the town hundreds of times, but he grew extra cautious rounding the first curve.

As the train came out of the curve, Mohr noticed a small dot on the track about 200 meters

ahead. He thought it might be a dog. Although it was against the rules to do so in the town, he

began lightly tapping his horn. "Come on, puppy, move," he urged.

The toots (嘟嘟响） of a train whistle startled (使受惊吓） Marshall from her yardwork.

That's odd, she thought. They don't usually blow the whistle through town. She glanced over to

check her daughter, and her heart skipped. Emily was nowhere in sight.

Now, as the train approached within 100 meters of the object on the rail, Mohr narrowed his

eyes, trying to make out what exactly was lying ahead. Then shock ran through him like electric

current.

注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；

2.应使用 5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语：

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Para 1

"My God!" he yelled as a tiny face turned towards him. “It's a baby!"

_______________________________________________________________________________

Para 2

The child was now just 36 meters ahead.

_______________________________________________________________________________

【答案】

Para 1

"My God!" he yelled as a tiny face turned towards him. “It's a baby!" Mohr had an instant decision

to make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped around a curve. He had

to risk an emergency stop. Hard as he try, the train kept moving just as a cat saw a fish, whose

enticing smell attracted the cat to approach the baby.Meanwhile, Marshall rushed towards her

daughter, nervous but desperate, fearing the train would run into her beloved.

“我的上帝啊！”他像一张小脸转向他时大声喊道。“这是个婴儿！”莫尔立即做出了决定，

实施了紧急刹车，一半的火车仍然绕在弯道上。他不得不冒着紧急停车的危险。在他的努

力中，火车继续移动，就像一只猫看到了一条鱼，它诱人的气味吸引了猫接近婴儿。与此

同时，马歇尔冲向紧张但绝望的女儿，担心火车会撞到她的爱人。

Para 2

The child was now just 36 meters ahead. Mohr pulled the brake with his whole efforts.The sound

of wheels grinding against the rails rang through the sky. The situation was quite dangerous.As the

train was almost stopped, he immediately opened the left door of the engine cab quickly and

swiftly jumped from the moving train and ran back to the child. She lay crying by the tracks.A

great relief sweeping over Mohr, he lifted her from the dirt hurriedly. It was only then that Mohr

noticed the train had stopped and Marshall was just coming to her baby.With the baby in his

arms,Mohr began to walk towards the mother.

这个孩子现在只有前面 36 米远。莫尔竭尽全力地拉下了刹车。车轮撞击铁轨的声音响彻天

空。情况很危险。当火车快停下来时，他立即打开驾驶室的左门，迅速从行驶的火车上跳

下来，跑回孩子身边。她躺在铁轨边哭泣。他使莫尔松了一口气，急忙把她从泥土里抬了

起来。直到那时，莫尔才注意到火车已经停了下来，马歇尔正要来接她的孩子。莫尔抱着

孩子，开始向母亲走去。

【分析】

本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了火车司机 Mohr，在一次驾驶火车全速前进时，他注意到远

处的铁轨上有个黑点，他以为是一条狗，后来证实这个黑点是一个婴儿。他要在保证火车

安全的情况下，救下这个婴儿。

【详解】

1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“我的上帝! ”当一张小脸转向他时，他大叫起来。“是个婴儿！”，

可知，第一段可描写火车司机 Mohr 的心理感受及其采取的措施，同时可以描写婴儿妈妈

Mashall 的现场反应。

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