初中英语九年级主题作文12-突发事件

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主题：突发事件

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本单元的主题是用英语谈论过去的突发事件,由此引导同学们学会及时从容应对,培养正确看待事物的

积极心态.与此关联的话题通常是用英语描述日常生活中一次难忘的、尴尬的、幸运的或特别的经历.这类

作文通常采用记叙文体裁.写作时,要讲清事情发生的时间、地点、经过和结果等.同时,主题要明确,文章所有

内容应紧紧围绕主题展开.同时,可适当抒发自己的情感.

可适用于本单元的主题有很多,如My unlucky day, An unforgettable day 等.

题目回放

生活中总是充满不可预料的事情.相信同学们在日常生活中一定有过愉快的、沮丧的、失望的甚至愤怒

的经历.假设你叫李华,请自拟标题,写一篇英语短文,描述自己经历过的一次预料之外的事情.

写作要点：

1.你经历了什么事情；

2.描述你当时的感受和体会.

写作要求：

1.不得出现你的真实姓名和校名；

2.词数 90 左右.

审题指引

1 审体裁：本文要求叙述一件自己经历过的意外之事,属于记叙文.

2 审内容：第一段引出要叙述的话题,第二段描述自己经历的意外事情,第三段发表感想和体会.

3 审时态：以一般过去时和过去完成时为主,可适当使用一般现在时.

4 审人称：以第一人称为主.

框架设计

开头：第一段引出话题.

中间：主体段落描述自己生活或学习中遇到的意外经历.

结尾：最后发表自己的感悟和体会.

段落素描

1. First paragraph: I am Li Hua, a junior high school student. I experienced something unexpected in my life.(I

am Li Hua, a student of Class One, Grade Nine. As we know, life is full of unexpectedness. I clearly remember ...)

(...)

2.The body: One day, when I...,I was attracted by...However, when I...,I found ... Even worse,... I realized that I had

been cheated.

(...)

3. Last paragraph: Indeed, life is filled with unexpected things. We have to face them bravely and calmly. (Indeed,

life is full of unexpected things. We are supposed to face them...Hopefully, measures will be taken to...)

(...)

范本淬炼

Life is full of unexpectedness

I am Li Hua, a junior high school student. I ① experienced something unexpected in my life.

One day, when I turned on the TV to relax for a little while, I ② was attracted by an exciting advertisement for

a toy, which was just the right thing ③ I had dreamed of all the time. I made a phone call and ordered the toy.

However, when I received the toy, I found it was not as beautiful as the one ④ introduced in the advertisement.

Even worse, it was expensive and of low quality. By then, I realized that ⑤ I had been cheated.

Indeed, life ⑥ is filled with unexpected things. We have to face them bravely and calmly.

①experience,经历,遭遇.

②was attracted 是一般过去时的被动语态.

③I had dreamed of ...是定语从句.

④ introduced 是过去分词充当后置定语,修饰 one.

⑤ I had been cheated,此处在宾语从句中使用了过去完成时的被动语态.

⑥ be filled with,充满.

亮点点评

1.开头直接点题,简要说明自己经历的一件预测之外的事,主体段落展开叙事,结尾总结并谈感想.要点齐

全,段落清晰,条理分明.

2.句式多样,使用了状语从句、被动语态、定语从句、宾语从句等,使文章句式富于变化,增强了文章的

可读性.

3.使用了一些衔接语,如 however, even worse, by then, indeed 等,使文章衔接顺畅.

4.使用了一些亮眼词语,如 attract, dream of, expensive, bravely, calmly 等.

Life is full of unexpectedness

I am Li Hua, ① a student of Class One, Grade Nine. As we know, life is short and full of unexpectedness. I

clearly remember an unexpected thing ② that happened to me.

One day, through an advertisement I ordered an online toy that I had ③ been eager to have for a long time.

However, when I received the toy, I was shocked to find it was ④ completely different from what the

advertisement had described. It was highly priced, and of low quality. I ⑤ came to realize that I had been cheated

by the advertisement.

Indeed, life if full of unexpected things. We are supposed to face them bravely and calmly. Hopefully,⑥

measures will be taken to prevent such bad things from happening again.

① a student of Class One 是Li Hua 的同位语.

②that 引导定语从句.

③ be eager to do sth.,渴望做某事.

④ completely,完全地,副词,修饰 different.

⑤ come to realize,逐渐认识到.

⑥measure,措施.

亮点点评

1.文章段落设计合理,逻辑清晰.开头引出主题,中间主体段落举例说明,结尾总结并提出建议.

2.本文句式富于变化,表达流畅,能灵活运用定语从句、时间状语从句、宾语从句等句式丰富文章内容.

3.比起上一篇文章,本文用词更丰富,如使用 eager, shock, completely, come to realize, prevent...from 等,增

加了文章的感染力.

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