初中英语九年级主题作文6-发明物品

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主题：发明物品

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本单元的主题是物品发明.通过用英语谈论某些物品及其发明的时间、地点、发明人、发明过程、用途

等,掌握被动语态的用法,同时在思维方面激发想象力,培养创造力.

本单元的关联话题有很多,如How was...invented? I want to invent a flying bicycle 等.

题目回放

我们的日常生活中有很多发明,其中一些发明改变了我们的生活方式.如果你是一个发明家,你最想发明

什么?它会给我们带来什么样的好处和便利?请以 I want to invent...为题,用英语写一篇文章.

写作要求：

1.把题目补充完整；

2.文章中不得出现你的真实姓名和校名；

3.词数 90 左右.

审题指引

1 审体裁：介绍发明的物品,属于说明文.

2 审内容：先点题说明想发明的物品,接着阐述此发明给我们带来的好处和便利,结尾简单谈谈感受.

3 审时态：主体时态为一般现在时和一般将来时.

4 审人称：以第一人称为主.

框架设计

开头：点题,介绍想发明的物品是什么.

中间：写出所发明物品的作用.

结尾：表达对实现梦想的期盼.

段落素描

1.First paragraph: With the development of science and technology,... plays an important role in ... Now I want to

invent...

(...)

2.The body: First,... Besides,...Most importantly,...

(...)

3.Last paragraph:... sb.'s dream come true ... make efforts to do...I hope that...

(...)

范本淬炼

I want to invent a flying bicycle

① There is no doubt that bicycles play an important role in our daily life. Now I want to invent a flying

bicycle, ② which is expected to be more useful in our life.

The flying bicycle will have two wheels and a pair of wings. We can ride it on the ground, or fly with it in the

air, which will help us go to our ③ destinations much faster. What is more, the flying bicycle will be lighter so that

we can carry it conveniently.

In a word ,the design for the flying bicycle will ④ be technologically practicable, and I believe that it will be

popular in the future.

①There is no doubt that...用此亮点句式点题,写出本发明的重要性.

② which 引导非限制性定语从句.

③destination,目的地.

④be technologically practicable,在技术上行得通.

亮点点评

1.本文框架设计合理,要点全面,条理清晰.

2.文中能适当运用街接词,如 what is more, in a word 等,使文章语言流畅,过渡自然.3.本文句式多样,如运

用了定语从句、目的状语从句和宾语从句.

I want to invent a flying bike

① With the rapid social development, environmental pollution is becoming increasingly serious. Therefore, I

want to invent an energy-saving flying bike.

First of all, the flying bike is ② designed to have two wheels and two wings so that we can either ride it on the

ground or fly with it in the sky. This will help us ③ reach our destinations much faster. ④ Another point worth

mentioning is that it will be able to protect our environment because it uses solar power to save energy. What is

more, there is an umbrella on the bike. If it rains, we will not get wet.

In all, I love my invention, and I wish it to ⑤bring convenience to people in the future.

① with the rapid social development,随着社会的快速发展.

②design,设计.

③ reach our destinations,抵达我们的目的地.

④ another point worth mentioning is that,值得一提的另外一点是.

⑤ bring convenience to people,为人们带来便利.

亮点点评

1.本文结构完整,逻辑清晰,从发明飞行自行车的必要性到其具有的功能等,一气呵成,可读性强.

2.句式富于变化,恰当使用了目的状语从句、表语从句、原因状语从句、条件状语从句等,表达流畅.

3.文章衔接自然,使用了 first of all, another point worth mentioning, what is more 等衔接语,前后衔接紧密,

显示了作者较强的语言驾驭能力.

4. 词汇运用丰富,遣词造句恰当准确,如使用了 rapid social development, environmental pollution,

increasingly serious, energy-saving, design, reach sb.'s destination, worth mentioning, bring convenience to 等,彰

显了作者较强的语言运用能力.比起上一篇作文,本文衔接更自然,用词和句式更丰富.

佳作赏析

I want to invent a special kind of medicine

① Owing to infectious diseases occurring sometimes across the globe, many people are in great trouble.

Therefore, I want to invent a special kind of medicine that can ② act on those people suffering from this disease.

First ,this medicine ③ will be used to cure patients with infectious diseases. Second, it can prevent healthy

people from suffering from such diseases.

Indeed,④ it will be difficult for me to invent this medicine, but I will work hard to achieve my dream.

①owing to,由于.

②act on,作用于.

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