初中英语九年级主题作文4-谈论变化

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主题：谈论变化

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本单元的主题是用英语谈论变化.通过教材提供的语言材料,同学们将学会用 used to be/used to do 这类

短语展开描述,继而表达自己的成长变化,包括外貌、性格、心理上的变化以及在生活和学习中所取得的进

步等方面.

与本单元相关联的话题很多,如 The greatest change I have ever made, I have made progress in my English

learning 等.

题目回放

我们的每一次变化都见证了我们的成长.请以 The greatest change I have ever made 为题,根据要点和要求

用英语写一篇短文.

写作要点：

1.变化是什么；

2.变化是如何发生的；

3.变化后有何感受.

写作要求：

1.文中不要出现你的真实姓名和校名；

2.词数 90 左右.

审题指引

1 审体裁：叙述成长变化,属于记叙文.

2 审内容：讲述自己最大的变化和由此带来的改变.

3审时态：主体时态为一般过去时.

4 审人称：以第一人称为主.

框架设计

开头：直接点题,引出话题.

中间：描述自己经历的事情和由此给自己带来的改变.

结尾：说明变化后的感受.

段落素描

1.First paragraph: Everybody is sure to change, and so am I. However, my greatest change is...

(...)

2.The body: I remember when ... Luckily ... Gradually... Surprisingly ...Thanks to...

(...)

3.Last paragraph: Thanks to ...

(Just as the saying goes...)

(...)

范本淬炼

The greatest change I have ever made

Everybody is sure to change, and ① so am I. However, the greatest change I have ever made is my gradual

love of reading books.

When I was a little child, I did not use to read books, for I thought it was boring. ② Afterwards, my mother

noticed this, and she started to read books with me. ③ Gradually, I began to love reading. When I was reading, I

felt as if I was talking with a wise man.

Thanks to my mother, I have become interested in reading. Indeed, reading has changed me a lot. I have ④

acquired more knowledge, and my life is more colorful.

① so am I.用倒装句,很自然地切入主题.

② afterwards,之后.

③用 gradually,准确描述出喜欢阅读的过程.

④acquire,获取.

亮点点评

1.本文围绕主题描述自己的某一改变,用三个段落呈现,段落布局清晰.

2.文中句式多变,定语从句、状语从句、动名词充当宾语和主语等运用恰当.

3.句子之间衔接自然,恰当运用了 afterwards, gradually, thanks to 等,使文章读起来较为顺畅.

The greatest change I have ever made

No doubt, everyone is sure to change, and ①so am I. However, the greatest change ② I have ever made is my

gradual love of reading.

I remember when I was a little child, I used to show no interest in reading simply because it was boring.

Noticing this, my mother ③ the significance of told me about and started to read books with me. Gradually, I was

attracted by books, ④ which led me into a new world. While reading, I felt ⑤ as if talking with a wise man. In fact,

reading brought me much knowledge, and made my life colorful and joyful.

Thanks to my mother's help, I ⑥ am used to reading, and I benefit a lot from it.

①so 引导倒装句.

②I have ever made 是定语从句,修饰 change.

③ the significance of reading, reading,阅读的重要性.

④which 引导非限制性定语从句.

⑤ as if talking with a wise man,仿佛在和一个有智慧的人对话.

⑥ be used to reading,习惯于读书.

亮点点评

1.本文用三段描述自己的改变,段落清晰,层次分明.

2.本文以 No doubt 开头引出话题,句式多样,富于变化,如运用了定语从句、宾语从句、伴随状语等.

3.用词丰富,灵活运用了丰富多样的词汇和短语,如 gradual, used to, show no interest in, significance, lead

sb. into, colorful, joyful, benefit a lot from 等,给文章增加亮点.

4.各种衔接语运用恰当,如 no doubt, however, gradually, in fact, thanks to 等,使句子和句子之间的连接自

然流畅,上下文联系更紧密.

与上一篇文章相比,这篇文章语言表现力更强,句式更丰富,内容更充实.

佳作赏析

I have made progress in my English learning

I used to be poor at English,① especially English reading and writing. The biggest problem was ② that after

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